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Anarch_Sek
06-07-2011, 21:04
http://www.squidoo.com/short-story-ignorance-is-bliss

Please read becuase everytime you do this site pays me 10:D

Arthanor
06-07-2011, 23:05
I guess I'm the first to give you 10, or at least the first to vote.

I enjoyed the story and I think the premise of it is really good. I'd say the ending suffers from an overdose of grimdark though. Overall, a good story and I don't think I wasted my time, which is more than I can say of a lot of fan fiction.

That being said, you really ought to figure out those symbols!

Anarch_Sek
08-07-2011, 03:42
two new stories hope you enjoy em

Visions
http://www.squidoo.com/short-story-visions

terminator
http://www.squidoo.com/short-story-terminator

Shadow Marine
09-07-2011, 07:22
I thought the lance strikes were abit extremem even for the inquistion. Surely the main characters would have just been killed and the remaining villagers just re-educated.
I say this because there was no evidence of choas taint or 'witch craft'.

But still a good story.

Jo-Jo
09-07-2011, 07:54
Should't this be in the stories sub forum?

Arthanor
09-07-2011, 22:43
I read what there was of "visions" but it's cut before the end. Good mood setting and I liked that you called something you wrote unimaginative in the text, nice jest. I looked at terminator and it ends prematurely too..

Should fix that and I'll read them.